You have some very interesting concepts there. The problem is you didn’t develop any of them into anything coherent so you come across as a ludicrous crank.
Here’s a little suggestion: pick one concept and develop it. Provide a clear thesis statement. Provide your support (factual, interpretive, and emotional). Address potential counterarguments. Wrap it into a nice conclusion.
Do that and you’ll come across as a person worth engaging with. Just randomly dropping words makes you look like the kind of person that would have been wearing a sandwich sign and distributing pamphlets with crudely-drawn fonts back in the '70s.
You have some very interesting concepts there. The problem is you didn’t develop any of them into anything coherent so you come across as a ludicrous crank.
Here’s a little suggestion: pick one concept and develop it. Provide a clear thesis statement. Provide your support (factual, interpretive, and emotional). Address potential counterarguments. Wrap it into a nice conclusion.
Do that and you’ll come across as a person worth engaging with. Just randomly dropping words makes you look like the kind of person that would have been wearing a sandwich sign and distributing pamphlets with crudely-drawn fonts back in the '70s.